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Trojin Relma Jennings Avatar Nobody is perfect and i'm nobody so im perfect Joined: November 16, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2418 Rep: PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)
Fan Fics Old Sat Feb 14, 2004 10:57:57 PM #5785 Perm Link
Ok I wrote a Fan Fic and i would like Somebody to read it...I hope you like it


http://www.mediaminer.org/fanfic/view_st.php/51197


Read it and review

Also if you have a Fan fic post it and i will read it

Edited at Tue Feb 17, 2004 12:26:10 AM
Im Mechant Gurl's Mechant Guy ehehheeh
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Aika Avatar Joined: July 2, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 844 Rep: PIP Level 2 (4974)PIP Level 2 (4974)PIP Level 2 (4974)PIP Level 1 (4974)PIP Level 1 (4974)
(No Title) Old Sun Feb 15, 2004 7:42:55 PM #5807 Perm Link
I just put my first fic up ^^ http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1736789&time=1077033778

Edited at Tue Feb 17, 2004 6:20:39 PM
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wolfwoodavenger31 Avatar I love it when a plan comes together Joined: January 7, 2004 Status: Offline Posts: 440 Rep: PIP Level 2 (2720)PIP Level 2 (2720)PIP Level 1 (2720)PIP Level 1 (2720)PIP Level 1 (2720)
Re: Fan Fic's Old Mon Feb 16, 2004 2:17:39 PM #5819 Perm Link
In response to Trojin Relma Jennings #5785
Yes its good and so is your aika
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Trojin Relma Jennings Avatar Nobody is perfect and i'm nobody so im perfect Joined: November 16, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2418 Rep: PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)PIP Level 1 (856)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 16, 2004 4:25:54 PM #5828 Perm Link
Thanks Wolfwood ^_^ and don't you have any fanfics to show?

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JaegoLooLoo Avatar Joined: October 10, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2009 Rep: PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 17, 2004 12:51:43 AM #5842 Perm Link
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You guys should read my Strifes and the Wallaces series. Good stuff, good stuff.
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Kitty Cat Mew Avatar hi bye thats like the whole school year Joined: August 30, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 1651 Rep: PIP Level 2 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 17, 2004 6:07:08 AM #5849 Perm Link
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Well then let us read it.

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Aika Avatar Joined: July 2, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 844 Rep: PIP Level 2 (4974)PIP Level 2 (4974)PIP Level 2 (4974)PIP Level 1 (4974)PIP Level 1 (4974)
Re[2]: Fan Fic's Old Tue Feb 17, 2004 10:14:22 AM #5851 Perm Link
In response to wolfwoodavenger31 #5819
Thanks ^^
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Sinistra Avatar Joined: October 31, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2531 Rep: PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 1 (12962)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 17, 2004 1:50:00 PM #5854 Perm Link
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Whats that? Is it FF7?

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JaegoLooLoo Avatar Joined: October 10, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2009 Rep: PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 17, 2004 4:47:03 PM #5863 Perm Link
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Eeeeeeeyup. I don't have a direct link, but it's on Fanfiction.net in the FinalFantasy7 section. Keep in mind, some are VERY OLD, so yeah. Also read Odditivity and what I have of Poo Llama (all in FF7).

My pen name is: Cloud Stryfe
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wolfwoodavenger31 Avatar I love it when a plan comes together Joined: January 7, 2004 Status: Offline Posts: 440 Rep: PIP Level 2 (2720)PIP Level 2 (2720)PIP Level 1 (2720)PIP Level 1 (2720)PIP Level 1 (2720)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 17, 2004 5:20:55 PM #5883 Perm Link
In response to Trojin Relma Jennings #5828
Sad to say but no
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Kitty Cat Mew Avatar hi bye thats like the whole school year Joined: August 30, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 1651 Rep: PIP Level 2 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)
(No Title) Old Wed Feb 18, 2004 5:39:56 AM #5947 Perm Link
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sure, Im going to go there in like two minutes

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Alexie Di Onie Avatar Joined: September 4, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 721 Rep: PIP Level 2 (1784)PIP Level 1 (1784)PIP Level 1 (1784)PIP Level 1 (1784)PIP Level 1 (1784)
(No Title) Old Thu Feb 19, 2004 9:23:24 AM #5999 Perm Link
just make sure you make them interesting.

I see now that the circumstances of one's birth is irrelevent. It is wat you do with the gift of life that makes you who you are.
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JaegoLooLoo Avatar Joined: October 10, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2009 Rep: PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)
(No Title) Old Thu Feb 19, 2004 10:23:10 AM #6004 Perm Link
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Who're you directing that at?
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Kitty Cat Mew Avatar hi bye thats like the whole school year Joined: August 30, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 1651 Rep: PIP Level 2 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)
(No Title) Old Thu Feb 19, 2004 3:33:16 PM #6012 Perm Link
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I think he was directing that to you. But Im not sure.

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JaegoLooLoo Avatar Joined: October 10, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2009 Rep: PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)
(No Title) Old Thu Feb 19, 2004 4:39:29 PM #6015 Perm Link
In response to Kitty Cat Mew #6012
I certainly hope not, because if he was, it wouldn't make any sense.
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Kitty Cat Mew Avatar hi bye thats like the whole school year Joined: August 30, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 1651 Rep: PIP Level 2 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)PIP Level 1 (1254)
(No Title) Old Thu Feb 19, 2004 6:54:35 PM #6019 Perm Link
In response to JaegoLooLoo #6015
Yea, but its not like he doesnt make any sense.

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JaegoLooLoo Avatar Joined: October 10, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2009 Rep: PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)
(No Title) Old Fri Feb 20, 2004 12:59:20 AM #6034 Perm Link
In response to Kitty Cat Mew #6019
Yes, it is like he doesn't make any sense. Baka gaijin Razz
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Sinistra Avatar Joined: October 31, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2531 Rep: PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 2 (12962)PIP Level 1 (12962)
Re: Fan Fics Old Sat Feb 21, 2004 3:26:19 PM #6153 Perm Link
In response to Trojin Relma Jennings #5785
I'm sorry but I couldn't finish your fic. I spent more of my time trying to figure out what the hell you were trying to say with your crappy spelling than what you were doing in the plot. Holy crap man!

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Anri Avatar Joined: July 19, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2145 Rep: PIP Level 2 (7705)PIP Level 2 (7705)PIP Level 2 (7705)PIP Level 1 (7705)PIP Level 1 (7705)
(No Title) Old Sat Feb 21, 2004 3:45:58 PM #6154 Perm Link
hmm well it needs a lot of work . .you need more detail, and the characters are "out of character" . . .You need to learn how to spell tetsusaiga. (and your spelling could use some work as well) I dunno it has the potential to be a good story, but I really don't know where to start. I mean the plot is clear for those who have watched or read inuyasha, but for someone who has never heard of it, they would have no idea what you were talking about with the jewels, the demons, and everything else.

People with courage and character always seem sinister to the rest.
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(No Title) Old Sat Feb 21, 2004 4:13:19 PM #6155 Perm Link
Being a writer, I despise everything about Fan Fics.
They are lazy attempts at writing a story using some one else's setting, characters, and at times, plot.
There is nothing remotely unique or interesting about any of them, because there was nothing remotely unique or interesting to begin with.
My advice; Take the time to create your own setting, to develop your own characters, and to create your own plot.

That being said, Trojin, do you know anything at <i>all</i> about writing?
I read the first chapter of your fan fiction, as painful as it was for me, and I've got to say that you definately need to pay more attention in English Class. Writing dialogue in interview style is neither correct nor 'cool'. The absence of quotes is also quite annoying.
When describing action, please DO NOT USE ACTION SYMBOLS. You are not role playing. You are writing. Well, you're trying to write, but what you're actually doing is raping a potential (albeit uncreative) story you could have had others read. Try to take the time to write paragraphs instead of lines, sentences instead of words, and letters instead of symbols. This should increase your writing skills by nearly 40%. Trust me, you need it.

Aika, I took a look at yours. I will first compliment you on your nod to grammar and spelling as it was quite a relief from the above story. But you seem to have the same problem as Trojin in writing one dialogue in interview style, using action symbols to describe actual actions. Although I did see a paragraph or two in there (WOO!). Some times your very descreptive with your setting, and some times you just allow it to chop from one place to the next. Try to keep an eye on this as you want your paper to flow nicely. You've got potential.

Jaego... I didn't look for yours. I will eventually though. So be ready.
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(No Title) Old Sat Feb 21, 2004 6:01:15 PM #6157 Perm Link
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Uh-oh! Just a few heads up, feel free to flame me about them anyway, but I'll just tell you.

The first Strifes and the Wallaces were made four years ago. I was ten, the writing is most likely lacking. More recently is the fourth episode, that's probably a bit better, but it's only a third complete.

Odditivity is a little better, it has actual paragraphs and setting descriptions (unlike S&W, which is in script form, sorry), but was still made a very long time ago. Expect a lacking story and few typos (like 'cna' instead of 'can' and 'teh' instead of 'the').

Poo Llama is made in Odditivity's form, but is very, VERY stupid. That's all I have to say.

My most recent piece of writing (not a fanfic!), I had to write for English class, I got 110/100 on it, so I guess its pretty good. It's my own version of 'The Odyssey', that was the project. UNFORTUNATELY, I can't attach it for some reason, if you know how could you please tell me? If you're going to read my stories, I'd like for you to read my best.
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(No Title) Old Sat Feb 21, 2004 6:47:57 PM #6161 Perm Link
In response to JaegoLooLoo #6157
Reduce it to a universal text format. Liek dis hurr &darr;
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JaegoLooLoo Avatar Joined: October 10, 2003 Status: Offline Posts: 2009 Rep: PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 2 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)PIP Level 1 (7361)
(No Title) Old Sun Feb 22, 2004 3:19:17 AM #6174 Perm Link
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Lol, it looks ugly in .txt format, but ooookay...
OKAY, now it's too big! I'll just post it on Deviantart and put up a link...







Jesus Christ...
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